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“If I had a penis, I would jack off so</u> hard.”

You were amused by my declaration, for some reason. I don’t know why. I was dead serious.

I continued stroking your hard penis and kissing your soft shoulder with my somewhat-chapped lips as we laid there in the small twin-size bed underneath an extremely soft blanket that you liked to refer to as being made of “sex fabric.” You stared at the ceiling as content as peanut butter is with jelly, breathing deeply with your arm around me, enjoying my touches.

“So what’s it like?” I asked you curiously. You turned your head to look at me with your magical, dancing blue eyes.

“What’s what like?”

“What’s it like to get a boner?”

You chuckled lightly, never seeming to tire of my child-like questioning. Often you’d shake your head at me, wondering where I came up with these ideas. Trying to figure out if I was serious, you continued to stare at me, blinking once.

I was determined to have this vital information. “I’m serious. Tell me what it feels like. Please?” I unleashed the puppy dog eyes.

“Um… alright.” You thought about it deeply, trying to master the words to explain it to me. “It’s like, well… ummm… ok, you know how you flex a muscle and it tightens and gets bigger and tense?” You demonstrated with your arm muscle. “It’s kinda like that.”

I thought about this, trying to imagine how I’d feel with a boner. I was slightly jealous.

“So how does it feel for you?” you asked after a minute or so. My curiosity was spreading. I loved that.

“What?” I asked, as if I didn’t know what you were going to ask. I just wanted to hear you say it.

“How does it feel to-- er…” You were so adorably awkward about it. I secretly smiled with pleasure, but kept a straight face. “… to… to have a penis in you?”

I thought about that, stroking my chin and squinting like a true intellectual. “Let me think about that for a second…” I honestly did try to find the words. You looked at me in wonder and anticipation. “It’s like…” I gave up. I couldn’t figure out what to say. I guess I didn’t try that hard in the first place.

A naughty grin spread across my sweet face. “Maybe if you remind me I’ll be able to put it into words better,” I said evilly. You raised an eyebrow as I reached over to kiss you tenderly on the cheek, sending a shiver down your spine. Next, I moved towards your ear, kissing it and wrapping my tongue around each little groove. You were holding me by then, tightening your grip with arousal. I could feel every muscle in your body stiffen a little.

“Are you okay?” I whispered teasingly into your wet ear as you squirmed against my body.

“Uh huh.” It was hardly more than a shallow breath, but said it all. It was time to start moving down. Neck, shoulders, chest, stomach-- I kept crawling downwards. You thought you knew where I was headed (excuse the pun), but at the last moment I moved back up and kissed your trembling lips while allowing my body to cover you completely. You responded eagerly with a warmth and passion that I rarely see (or feel) in you. I could feel you poking at my lower grounds. You were sweating, tortured by the intimacy of this position. It was only when I knew you couldn’t take it anymore and you wanted so badly to force your way into me that I spread my legs, giving you the cue to indulge yourself.

[Insert paragraph full of moans and panting and here- your favorite part.]

You completed the task, falling onto my body and resting your head on my bare breasts. Panting, all you could do was give me a weak kiss and say “That was good” between breaths. This was my favorite part, when I could hold you and stroke your wet hair, feeling like an empress who just conquered a mighty kingdom.

After a little while you caught your breath a little. “I’m going to go clean up,” you said. I knew what would happen next.

You rolled over off of me, sat up on the edge of the bed, stood up, took one step… and fell onto your hands and knees. You moaned, I giggled. This was also my favorite part. A feeling of power shot through me. I was a goddess and you were the helpless man that could not handle my awesome strength! Take that!

“I can’t walk!” I could see that. Was it that surprising? You’re helplessness was beautiful.

“Um… do you need any help, dear?” I offered this mockingly. I wouldn’t help you! I was having too much fun watching you struggle. You wouldn’t let me anyways-- you liked the challenge of it. I continued watching you crawl towards the bathroom while I basked in the glory of my accomplishment. We both wreaked of hot, steamy sex.

When you returned, still weak and sweaty and smelly, the first thing you asked me was “So, how does it feel?”

I smiled. I was doing that a lot lately, for some reason. “It feels good. Really, really good.” There’s no other way to describe it. I kissed you quietly and laid the subject to rest.
A lot of people have been waiting for me to finish and submit this story-- I hope it's not a disapointment. I wanted to write an erotic story that wouldn't be what people would expect to read. Plus, I've always tried to be a very honest writer.

I don't write a lot of prose, so I'm really looking forward to getting feedback on this one. It was fun to write and I hope it'll be fun to read too. If you like it, great. If you don't, I want to get some suggestions to fix it.

Enjoy!!!

Amy

Edit: I changed the bracketed paragraph in the middle to something I think fits a little better.
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jhdragonreader Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I enjoyed the insight into the boner as I personally feel awkward and useless around them 3: ,  the insert moans and panting and the attention to the puns broke the story up. But other than that it was like a real situation just not as descriptive as one would expect.
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EonOrteaShadowmaster Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010  Student Writer
An impressive little piece of work. Well written.
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kuumakana95 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
incredible, very passionet yet so innocent the way you joke and giggle with eatch other
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kuumakana95 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
incredible, very passionet yet so innocent the way you joke and giggle with eatch other
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ericasilber Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
like an empress who had conquored a mighty kingdom... wonderful. i love that feeling but have never been able to express it
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Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2009  Professional Artisan Crafter
thanks :)
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Between-Borderlines Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009
This is just absolutely awesome, such a completely different perspective I've never seen or heard before! Loved it!
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:iconlady-blue:
Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2009  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thanks! I'm always amazed at how much attention this piece still gets despite how old it is. :P
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pookychan Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2009
I like this :)
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:icondarkness-in-light627:
haha, you describe the thought of the girl perfectly when he falls !! ^^
this is really good, not what is generally expected, and at the same time, erotic, but cute !!
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:iconlady-blue:
Lady-Blue Featured By Owner May 24, 2009  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thanks! This was written soooo long ago that I'm surprised people are still finding it. :P
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ChangeOfHeart72 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008
The writing was really good, and I also liked it's lightheartedness. It was sweet, which added to the enjoyment of reading it :)
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Ciardubh Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2008  Professional General Artist
it's brilliant, and I like it's lightheartedness
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killingthepoor Featured By Owner May 22, 2008
idk how to explain how much i liked it.
so much like real life, your good at telling this story
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mariah138124 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008
Excellent. I had written a prose work previously of about the same category, but I don't have very much self-confidence and it probably comes out in my writing...I live the fist person usage; and I know you've gotten this word so much in your other comments, but it truly was 'sweet'...in the purest sense of the word. And I do love the first person point of view. It was like, "Huh? You talkin' to me?!"
And your prose is sugar-sweet. The emotions in my little prose are bittersweet. Funny though...I found myself wondering the same thing. Sex is so fascinating. <3
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ClaudiaCasanova Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2008
I absolutely adore the little insertions. XD That was quite clever.
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StudyDungeonMistress Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2008
Heh nothing like some good ol' feminism in the bedroom to remind guys who really comes out on top (excuse the pun) ;)
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Jacob-the-epic Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2008
I love it. Its erotic, intimate, and cute all wraped in a tortillia of hilarity.
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Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2008  Professional Artisan Crafter
awww thanks!
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AaronHolden16 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2007
sounds fun love the story
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DarkestJourney Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2007
There is something definitely different about this piece, and I mean different in a good way. It reminded me of my boyfriend and I, but that wasn't why I liked it so much - it felt real, like real words between two real people, in a real moment, and that, I think is rare in erotica and romance stuff, it's always "Hollywood-ified" and glamourized and sexed up, but this... this was real, and it was excellent =]
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Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2007  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thanks so much! :)

I wrote this so long ago, but it's still getting good comments, so perhaps I should work on a new one...
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DarkestJourney Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2007
I say go for it =D
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KestralWolfe Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This was great. I had my hubby come in to read it, and he smiled and giggled with me. It's good to be reminded that an erotic story doesn't have to be full of the gratuitous stuff to be powerfully erotic. It was frank, open, playful... and intensely hawt.
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Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2007  Professional Artisan Crafter
I'm so glad the two of you enjoyed it! :)
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YourWildestDreams Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2007
Very nicely done! Bravo!
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Dead-Poet-11 Featured By Owner May 23, 2007  Student Traditional Artist
So Witty and Unexpected, I like it a lot. Very....hmm...Well it seems I'm at a loss of words as well.
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maxbloom Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2007
This is my favorite kind of writing about sex. Funny and realistic... and human.
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Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2007  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thanks :)
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slanderous Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2007
aww i really really like it. its like, not trashy, somehow. hahaha. i miss being intimate like this with the person i loved. even tho this is erotica, you can tell they love eachother, and somehow its not trashy, its just, nice. :] and sweet, like they said. and very, very honest.
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sexylillindsey Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2006   Writer
I liked this alot. Though... I would have liked it more with two girls :wink:
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araphra Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2006
There is something so sweet about this xD.
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:iconlady-blue:
Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2006  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thanks so much!

Just out of curiousity, though... this is a really old submission of mine. How'd you find it?
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:iconaraphra:
araphra Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2006
I was browsing through "popular prose literature" and stumbled across it ^^
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Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2006  Professional Artisan Crafter
cool :)
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CRGuardian Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Good work in capturing the human sexuality :)
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Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2006  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thanks!
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Tank-boy Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2006
Thank god, someone has written erotica that isn't boring, cringeful, laughably amateurish, contrived, embarrassing, stupid or crude. Thank you.
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Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2006  Professional Artisan Crafter
:blush: Thank you :)
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vkitty9 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2006
You are too brilliant. You write with a humanity and a wry sense of humor I rarely see in works of eroticism--usually there's too much heaving and overblown romanticism and such, but this is sweet in its own simple way. :) Thanks.
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trivial0921 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2006
this sounds SO much like you =P
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vkitty9 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2006
Her writing? I would hope; she rocks.
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Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2006  Professional Artisan Crafter
Awwww... thank you!

I just think that sex should be fun instead of just serious and sweaty and filled with strange noises... =P
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vkitty9 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2006
Agreed. :)
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dannyboyk2 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2005
Your style is excellent. The basic elements are all there, of course-- word choice, grammar, etc... but this story possess characteristics that I usually find sadly lacking in "erotic prose."

1. You succeed in giving your characters personalities in a short span of prose. It is too often that I find authors focusing solely on the act of sex in erotic prose, which makes their characters out to be machines or nymphomaniacs... Your characters maintain playfulness about their sex and are still able to enjoy it. I liked that. I liked it a lot.

2. Your sense of timing and paragraph spacing was wonderful.

I truly enjoyed reading this on several levels, sexual and otherwise. Thank you. :-)
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Lady-Blue Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2005  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thank you so much for your comments! I haven't written anything significant in a while, so it's good to be reminded that I was a writer and could pick it back up again.
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rebelvyxen Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2004
haha thats great! ive always wondered what it would be like to have a penis...they make guys act so funny lol its so cute how their most precious possesion usually ends up possesing them:giggle:
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lady-maree Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2004
yep yep...........you are offically in my good writers books..lol...that makes only 3 on da that i've found to my standards. and i love the way you just left out hte usual " moans and groans" ..but still maintained the flow of hte story..well done..brilliant work

Maree
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deadspirit6 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2003  Professional General Artist
well done..:+fav: for me ..I should post my prose too.
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produkt Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2003  Professional Artist
This reminds me of one of this Chicken Soup for the Soul stories.

Except porn.
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